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Sunku 8
Grieving
Love lost
Dispair
Thinking
Future loss
Fearful
Unexplainable
Tears falling
Sadness
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Comments
weirdelf
Mon, 2018-02-26 22:46
Sunk form has been settled
3 stanzas, 2/3/4 syllables per line. This is far off but very good. My reading
https://vocaroo.com/i/s01rcy4uVIxO
cheers,
Jess
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raj
Tue, 2018-02-27 05:18
Your Sunku does express the
Your Sunku does express the fear to move on in life after a bad experience ...the third stanza apparently expresses sadness for even thinking about moving on...
I agree with Jess that there is room to work on this to conform to Sunku ...i am sure you will be able to do it...third stanza is too open to read ...
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raj (sublime_ocean)