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To A Dear Friend
Thank you, my friend
for turning my frown,
upside down
and nurturing
the seeds of joy
in my heart
when I felt I'm lost
and torn apart.
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Free verse
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Comments
mand
Wed, 2016-05-25 03:47
Hi Alid
Such a lovely tribute to a friend. :) There is so much to like about this poem, I really like the phrase "turning my frown upside down.." The poem is simple but effectively saying all that you want to say. I also really like the rhyming pattern - which enhances the flow very nicely.
All in all this is a really good poem - well done Alid.
Can't see any crits. :)
Love to you
Mand xx
alidzain
Fri, 2016-05-27 16:03
Mand
Thanks for the visit, the read and kind words. Glad you liked it.
Alid
Rula
Wed, 2016-05-25 01:45
dear Khalid
if you have only one friend who can get the frown upside down, you are then good. Don't let others break your heart. You have a big warm one. Always remember that.
You've penned here a little gem.
Take care Man!
❤❤❤❤❤❤
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alidzain
Fri, 2016-05-27 16:06
Salam, Rula
I'm lucky to have a good friend who still help me to be strong and a better man, indeed. Thanks for the Visit, the read and the comments.I'll tale your advice.
Alid
jane210660
Sun, 2016-06-05 04:02
This is beautiful, I wish I'd
This is beautiful, I wish I'd written it. Jx
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alidzain
Sun, 2016-06-05 11:43
Hi Jane
Sometimes I feel the same way when I read others' poems too. My favourite is Serendipity's poems, raj's and Rula.Thanks for the visit, the read and comment.
Alid