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To A Dear Friend

Submitted by alidzain on Tue, 2016-05-24 14:52

Thank you, my friend
for turning my frown,
upside down
and nurturing
the seeds of joy
in my heart
when I felt I'm lost
and torn apart.

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mand

Wed, 2016-05-25 03:47

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Such a lovely tribute to a friend. :) There is so much to like about this poem, I really like the phrase "turning my frown upside down.." The poem is simple but effectively saying all that you want to say. I also really like the rhyming pattern - which enhances the flow very nicely.

All in all this is a really good poem - well done Alid.

Can't see any crits. :)

Love to you

Mand xx

alidzain

Fri, 2016-05-27 16:03

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Thanks for the visit, the read and kind words. Glad you liked it.

Alid

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Rula

Wed, 2016-05-25 01:45

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if you have only one friend who can get the frown upside down, you are then good. Don't let others break your heart. You have a big warm one. Always remember that.
You've penned here a little gem.
Take care Man!

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alidzain

Fri, 2016-05-27 16:06

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I'm lucky to have a good friend who still help me to be strong and a better man, indeed. Thanks for the Visit, the read and the comments.I'll tale your advice.

Alid

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jane210660

Sun, 2016-06-05 04:02

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This is beautiful, I wish I'd written it. Jx

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alidzain

Sun, 2016-06-05 11:43

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Sometimes I feel the same way when I read others' poems too. My favourite is Serendipity's poems, raj's and Rula.Thanks for the visit, the read and comment.

Alid

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