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TRUE LIES
TRUE LIES
You said you would love me
forever
that was true…..
forever ]
was only a day for you.
You told me there was
no other
that was no lie
there were at least
four or five
now you said
you would never
walk away
nothing was more exact,
the fact is you put on your little
red sneakers worn and torn
from use and ran like hell
to who knows where
but sweat pea, honey bunch
what is true is that I was doing
the same to you.
darling, sweet of my heart
have you seen my Nikes,
the ones with worn down
treads
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Comments
alidzain
Tue, 2016-05-10 10:45
hmmm
bro, this one looks like a poem about betrayal.
Alid
Geremia
Tue, 2016-05-10 10:52
many times. joe
many times.
joe
jane210660
Tue, 2016-05-10 10:54
Made me laugh out loud.
Made me laugh out loud.
Still chuckling. Jx
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Geremia
Tue, 2016-05-10 11:00
a bit of comic relief. My
a bit of comic relief. My poems are so dark.
mand
Tue, 2016-05-10 10:59
Hi Joe
LOve the twist at the end!
Seems it was time for them both to move on! :)
Thanks for sharing. :)
Love Mand xxx
Geremia
Tue, 2016-05-10 11:01
I am glad you enjoyed it,
I am glad you enjoyed it,
mand
Tue, 2016-05-10 11:06
:)
Always do - you're a clever poet. :)
brittle light
Wed, 2016-05-11 07:28
Joe
You still have a glaring brightness. Writing this witty little story proves it so.
And even if this is an oldie but goodie, the good sense to post it shows the light is still shining.
thanks
Al
Geremia
Wed, 2016-05-11 09:22
the light still shines, not
the light still shines, not so bright, yet bright enough/
lovedly
Fri, 2016-05-13 06:59
a candle called Joe.....
can be seen from the galaxy so bright
souls abiding there
do hear him alright
Geremia
Fri, 2016-05-13 07:38
flickering candle not so
flickering candle not so bright
holding on with all its might
than k u, my friend