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Remembrance
Retracing the past
where dear memories bloomed
as moments shared
filled with colours of love,
friendship and innocence
The best years of my life
are in my youth
when my body is filled
with more vigor
and the heart is fresh
with hope and dreams
for the future
I wonder about old friends
who once stood by my side.
Its long since we have parted.
Each of us, finding our own paths
to embrace our ambitions.
I hoped our paths will meet
for it felt as if our reunion
has been long-overdued
Sighing, I faced the sky
sending my prayers
and well wishes to the wind
for the friends I have lost
through time
yet always there
in my mind
Style / type:
Free verse
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Comments
Seren
Mon, 2014-06-09 10:38
Alid
Your starting to let the artist in the poet out, your starting to paint your world for us, I am loving watching your growth....well done
love and hugs Jayne xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
alidzain
Mon, 2014-06-09 12:56
Dearest Jayne
I owe it to people like you. Each time I feel like I want to stop writing all I have to do is read your works and revive that old dream and I started to write again. Anyway I'm glad you like this one. Thanks for the visit.
Alid
loved
Mon, 2014-06-09 13:22
good and sad
good and sad
you have not remembered me
am i now out of sight
do say so
I am a simple poet
you and all know
off the cuff
i compose
and let you aalllll
in the garbage bin of time
dispose
some repose
I now suppose
hankering again eh!
if Jess sees it
read it and then I will delete it
Jess is coming
go see out of the window
leave the door ajar
we will know
when he is not far..
but do never forget me
loved
alidzain
Mon, 2014-06-09 14:15
me forget you?
if you are a simple poet then what am I? nah, you're good. I'm still the amateur here. LOL.
Alid
Ian.T
Mon, 2014-06-09 19:11
Alid
One that we have been waiting for.
Good words, careful thoughts, and a great theme.
Welcome to another level,
Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
alidzain
Mon, 2014-06-09 19:42
Thank you, Ian
Let's hope that I can keep this up shall we?
Alid