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you are so intimate

that's what I thought
as I stepped forward
my chest seemed to be caught
in the lengthy nails
I imagined to be, too true
yes that was you,....

then a side twist of my body
upon yours curvaceous
jerked me off
as you tried to too,

but sudden transformation of a reality,
to a dream that now say you,
made me go down the corridors
naked to scream
foul play upon my nerves
I did display,
how could you place
my thoughts in disarray?
to calm me down to look like a fool
Imagining in my dreams
Sweety twas really you

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How glad I am to know that I've got the power to disarray your thoughts!

This is one of my favourites.
I like the word use and you had me checking the dictionary at times.

lady thanks
you are a wonderful poet at your ung age

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I too, liked this poem very much, because of its layers of depth. You get better and better with each new write!

always, Cat (& eddy)

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Yes, Good one.

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