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twin
He hears and sees, as I meander through
this world that needs be taken day by day.
For cognisance, he has the perfect view -
my deepest thoughts, to him, are on display.
He shadow escorts me throughout the dreams
where I am Home - it's both surreal and real -
where unconditional love feeds me, it seems.
I wake to find I have a new found zeal.
Conflicting the accepted paradigm
of seperate single conscience, seperate soul,
I know that part of his is part of mine
and, while I am awake, I am not whole.
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Structured: Western
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Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story
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jane210660
Mon, 2016-05-16 04:09
A beautiful poem, it lives
A beautiful poem, it lives halfway between this world and the next.Jx
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judyanne
Mon, 2016-05-16 10:33
Jane
Thank you for the visit and very kind comment
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
author commentKeith Logan
Mon, 2016-05-16 05:13
Beautifully written
poem about the shared love of created and creator. One who made us almost like gods with the power to create new life.
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judyanne
Mon, 2016-05-16 10:35
hi Keith
Thanks very much for the read and very supportive comment
love judy
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'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
author commentmand
Mon, 2016-05-16 08:33
HI Judyanne
So good to read your work - two in one, without which life is not whole. The content of this poem is both powerful and comforting!
Thank you for sharing!
Glad you're back - you are a great teacher - on so many levels.
Love Mand xxx
judyanne
Mon, 2016-05-16 10:37
Mand !!! lovely to see you
Thank you so very much for the lovely and supportive comments
it's nice to be back
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
author commentRula
Mon, 2016-05-16 14:01
lovely!
As usual dear Judy.
I liked the "sshadow escorts" expression. (New for me)
And I'd capitalize 'he' and 'his', (just my humble opinion)
Thank you for sharing dear.
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judyanne
Mon, 2016-05-16 21:08
thanks Rula
I purposely didn't capitalise 'he / his'....
I didn't want to necessarily tie the subject to a deity, hoping it could be read in other ways as well
Love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
author commentjane210660
Tue, 2016-05-17 05:57
I actually took it to mean a
I actually took it to mean a missing sibling. Gone, but for ever with you.
But then, I do take things rather literally at times :-) Jxx
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judyanne
Tue, 2016-05-17 06:03
yes Jane
The write has multiple meanings....
thank you
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
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