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Through The Bubblewand
My life: A soda bottle, way too many times shaken
By woes and worries, which made dents and holes
In my tense tin. All the while, they did take in
My substance, a sugar craved in their goals.
Why for so long my voice has been forsaken?
Engulfing my bottled cries, Psalms of souls.
Countless hard twists, tried to cap the fizz
Although I already erupted what I drank!
Now, I gave up trying to down strap the whizz
As of talking with you, a mind calm and blank
With this sober morn. I gulped a sap that is
Coated with sugar that is however lank.
I learned to abort this rubble spawned,
Like tribulations past were not prone to exist.
By mere mouths, such a double bond
Between us two. I have out flown the mist
By blowing confessions through the bubble wand.
Though bubbly and warm, I have shown my fist. The End.
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Thu, 2023-10-12 00:00
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Lavender
Thu, 2023-10-12 14:12
Through The Bubblewand
Greetings, Eva!
Welcome to Neopoet!
Kudos to such an impressive poem, especially this unique and complex rhyme pattern. The more I study it, the more I respect your commitment.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
Again, welcome!
Lavender
Obadiah Grey
Wed, 2024-05-01 15:19
I love the quirky wistful
I love the quirky wistful "nature" of this piece.
Its wonderfully odd !
Obi.