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The thoughts, feelings, actions.

Submitted by scooby on Sat, 2021-05-01 12:03

How can you say you care when you don't spare me a thought
I thought our love would never change who knew it could be bought
You spend your time on video games, you hide and don't get caught
I spend my hours with my mind painted of you, you think i cant be taught.
You say there no reason to doubt but i can find a lot.
I doubt you truly love me when you don't spare me a thought.

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c lynn brooks

Sat, 2021-05-01 16:01

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Nice work may I suggest you write in stanzas
example
How can you say you care
when you don't spare me a thought
I thought our love could never change
who knew it could be bought

and so on line breaks are a substitute for commas

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Ray Whitaker

Mon, 2021-05-03 12:08

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Could be song lyrics.... from a band like Tom Petty and the Heartbreakers.

I would think this would be a great Spoken Word piece.

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