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SunKu 8 Workshop

Submitted by Barbara Writes on Tue, 2018-02-20 12:30

Grandkids
my heart string
home for Christmas

no water
a week in
at the hotel

Grandkids
hung out
with grandma

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Workshop: 
Sunku: beyond rhyme and rhythm, search for new structures in short form

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IRiz

Tue, 2018-02-20 15:08

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I especially love the first stanza.
What a great metaphor!

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Barbara Writes

Tue, 2018-02-20 16:18

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Glad you enjoy it

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.

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Sparrow

Tue, 2018-02-20 18:24

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A great write and I love this new way,
it makes you think.
Take care of you,
Me as always, Ian. x

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Barbara Writes

Wed, 2018-02-21 08:24

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I appreciate you visiting my work. Glad you like it. I like writing this way. I’m gonna master it for sure

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.

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