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Space Rock (8 word imagery workshop)

Submitted by Eumolpus on Tue, 2017-06-27 12:01

Sponge meteorite smoothed to blackness by star dust

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The Willamette Meteorite greets you at the Planetarium in NYC. I must have been in 6th grade at a school visit, I never forgot the feeling of touching it (allowed) , its blackness, and smooth surface, looking like swiss cheese, a rock from outer space! see it: http://www.amnh.org/exhibitions/permanent-exhibitions/rose-center-for-earth-and-space/dorothy-and-lewis-b.-cullman-hall-of-the-universe/planets/planetary-impacts/the-willamette-meteorite
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Workshop: 
IMAGERY IN POETRY( ready to start?)

Comments

scribbler

Tue, 2017-06-27 12:53

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I really like this. I expect not everybody is aware that a lot of material in space has a sponge like structure......stan

jane210660

Tue, 2017-06-27 15:30

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I can see it straight away.
A fantastic image.
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jane210660

Tue, 2017-06-27 15:33

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You are included in the workshop, so to make sure your eight words are too, click on edit. Scroll down to the workshop tab at the bottom of the page. Select imagery and save. This way, your work is saved in the workshop collection.
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Race_9togo

Tue, 2017-06-27 22:05

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The contrast between porousness and smoothness really works, and the implications of star dust comes out very strong.
Very nice.

Respectfully, Race

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