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Solitary thought

In solitude I wonder
crippled by man,
I sit stare and ponder.
Is the moon hidden this night,
or is it ashamed of what it bears witness to.
The man in the moon who can see right through.

In solitude I stare,
witness to the explosions of war.
This night I pray you moon,
see the ants and the burdens inside,
not the explosions that leave the dead on the outside.
Moon do not go blind,
in solitude we still look for the angel to help us find.

A bit old are the words in me,
but this night these words free me.
This night moon look,
this night moon I know,
look hard enough and you shall grow.
Look hard enough and be free
for humanity still fights within me.

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Been awhile but a simple thought . No title as such yey
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I think this piece is grand and deserves a few more comments, the form I am not sure of but there are others that can help with this, Yours Ian.T

PS:- you need a G in strength on your profile Take care......

Always just loved the (strenth) and beauty in words

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

First off thank you for your comment and
as for my profile so true THAT is horrid.
to use a word like grand is a massive thank you.
you are 100% on the form.
There is none.
Wish i had more time to learn as i love words and poetry
but work is always 24/7.
thank you.

Zane

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