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Silly me

Submitted by Creatrix on Sun, 2012-03-11 15:10

No promises no pain, if it was so easy i would be in Haven.
It’s not your fault I’m so easy to broke, I wish I wasn’t
But what can I do now? Just keep my head undercover
And hope to forgive myself for falling in love with you.
I close my eyes and imagine that I’m in different place
Different skin, different soul. But it’s not gonna happened
So what, I’m just me, silly, stupid and naïve me. Forgive me.

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Esker

Sun, 2012-03-11 23:56

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like this work this creation this poem
"Different skin, different soul, But it's not gonna happen"
i really like this line.. It doesnt say wish
or If only.. a grounded kind of acknowledgement
"forgive myself for falling in love with you"
a mature viewpoint for a poet
for practical sense

seven of the more interesting lines Ive read lately

Thank You!

loved

Mon, 2012-03-12 01:42

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Esker, found it so loving
some minor typo maybe
overlook we may
your maiden poem

loved

Candlewitch

Mon, 2012-03-12 11:59

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and welcome to neo poet! I loved these lines:

But what can I do now? Just keep my head undercover
And hope to forgive myself for falling in love with you.

always, Cat

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