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Sexily Rabbitic

Submitted by loved on Mon, 2012-02-20 03:30

Rabbits only sexualize,
they homoise
and
are downright stupid,
in intelligence naught
and
forever in sexual acts get caught.

The sex in rabbits
surpasses all
and
intelligence,
you as a woman
too have after all.

Look around the world,
UK and India and indirectly America
are ruled by women

Sexual rape and body massage
are simple acts on their part
as men are born
with an external sword,
women hold the umbilical cord

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Candlewitch

Tue, 2012-02-21 12:00

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an interesting poem, to say the least. What is (homoise)? I couldn't find it in my dictionary. Rabits are very low in intelligence and are very into their basic needs, to be sure, lol. I wouldn't say that the world is run by women, as I feel the strong opression of the dominant male influence, here in America. And it is pervassive in the Aribic lands. Rape is not a simple act but an act of rage. Influenced by how the perp was conditioned in my humble opinion. But you made me think, so thank you! Keep writing!

always, Cat

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loved

Tue, 2012-02-21 22:22

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for your conveyance.
As a mini bard I take the liberty to coin
and
the word conveys a sense of homosexuality,
In rabbits,
as it does in males.
The rest is a matter of perception.

American women indirectly rule/ruled America .
In the times of the Reagan era,
not a leaf stirred
unless ma'am was Okayed
by her astrologers.

Later Lewinsky, I think played a major role .
Now we have Hillary .
Three examples for USA
I think should suffice.
Thanks anyway
you comfort the poet in me.

loved

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weirdelf

Thu, 2012-02-23 03:41

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my early crits of your poems were insulting because they made no sense, they seemed to me silly verbal plays that had no meaning (to me anyway, perhaps I missed your meaning)

You are now writing real meaning and I think you will improve.

Your percentage of poems for a book will improve I am sure.

homoise [hormonise]?

Your ambivalent sexuality is difficult to many people, yet I applaude your courage for expressing it,
with love and respect,

cheers,
Jess
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loved

Mon, 2012-02-27 00:08

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As you applaud
I salute you,
for the boldness instilled in me
by you
and
only by you

loved

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