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In search of love

Submitted by Barbara Writes on Mon, 2012-10-01 11:39

the moon shines bright
faithfully every thirty days
as some enjoy the night

wishing upon the stars
for another chance
to change the world

the ocean water ripples
carrying with its memories
of those standing on it shores

taking hold of its power
to find love infinities
where no one knows a broken heart

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Rula

Tue, 2012-10-02 13:20

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Especially liked your wishes in

wishing upon the stars
for another chance
to change the world

the ocean water ripples
carrying with it memories
of those standing on it shores ------> maybe on(( its ))shores

Thanks for sharing

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Barbara Writes

Tue, 2012-10-02 23:19

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I miss that one . Thanks for liking and commenting

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