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Sadly
Sadly
sadly time never lies
when love sprouts then dies
in thorny hearts
sadly truths gets hidden
when deceit takes root
in dishonest words
sadly life gets rougher
going gets tougher
when faces turn their back on you
be true to self
when a fall is shameful
stand tall walk in integrity
Style / type:
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
wesley snow
Sun, 2012-03-11 16:03
I'm dreadfully curious.
You marked "structured Eastern". What sort of poetic form is this? I understand haiku. Beyond that I'm lost.
Oh, and by the way, just as I pegged it... Not a single typo in the whole poem. It's exactly what you intended to have read. wesley
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Barbara Writes
Sun, 2012-03-11 19:23
Wesley
I have no idea whey eadtrn or western form is. I click it to see if any fir know
Thanks glad it turn out as you pegged lol
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loved
Sun, 2012-03-11 19:32
A poet's impression
A poet's impression
individual and a personal conception
well transformed in any form
yours is
loved
Barbara Writes
Sun, 2012-03-11 21:16
thanks loved
You comment is refreshing.
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loved
Mon, 2012-03-12 01:46
so kind
in duplicate I find
Thanks BW
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Barbara Writes
Sun, 2012-03-11 21:17
thanks loved
Your comment is welcoming
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scribbler
Sun, 2012-03-11 22:26
Hey Carolina girl
A good statement of self reliance. For indeed we can often only count on ourselves in times of turmoil. Ithink in line 8 maybe going gets tougher might read a bit better................stan
Ian.T
Mon, 2012-03-12 03:42
Barbara
East or West it matters not, I looked at this piece as there were comments about which Hemisphere it came from and thought that to be exact each of your stanzas would make a lovely Haiku then you would be pure Eastern Promise lol.
As it is it is a well written piece, so not to worry about its Gender, lol,
Yours Ian.T
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Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-03-12 10:01
thanks Ian
Some insight into hemispheric poetry
Your comment is welcoming
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Barbara Writes
Mon, 2012-03-12 09:51
thanks Stan
Of course you are right
My brain flip flopped on that one
the reading was a bit off, but instead of lamenting too long, I went ahead and posted
Glad you noticed and point out
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