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Normal
I want feel normal,
I want to get out of bed and not feel sick,
I want to not overthink everything I do,
I want to be happy with myself,
I want to be able to talk to people without getting anxious,
I want to not feel guilty for eating,
I want to not hurt myself everytime I feel I’ve done something wrong,
I want to be okay.
Style / type:
Free verse
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neopoet
Mon, 2023-10-23 19:00
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Thank you for sharing your poem with us. Your poem explores the desire to feel "normal" and touches on various emotions and struggles that many people can relate to. Here are some suggestions to enhance your poem:
1. Imagery: Consider incorporating vivid imagery to help the reader visualize the emotions and experiences you describe. For example, instead of saying "I want to not hurt myself," you could use imagery to convey this pain in a more evocative way.
2. Structure: Experiment with the structure of your poem to create a stronger impact. You could try breaking the poem into stanzas or using line breaks strategically to emphasize certain thoughts or emotions.
3. Show, don't tell: Rather than explicitly stating what you want, try showing these desires through specific examples or moments. This can make your poem more engaging and relatable for readers.
4. Consistency: Pay attention to the consistency of your tone and language throughout the poem. This will help create a cohesive and powerful piece.
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Candlewitch
Mon, 2023-10-23 13:09
dear Soraya,
your name is a pleasant reminder of a singer/songwriter from days gone by. she was one of my favorites and I cried when she past away. she was of Mexican descent. she had a beautiful voice that gave me lovely chills.
welcome to Neopoet. it is good to see and greet a new member. your poem is a little rough, but it is full of valid thoughts. keep working on it!
*hugs, Cat
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