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Motional Impact

Submitted by Twizzle48 on Tue, 2022-10-25 15:03

MOTIONAL IMPACT

I saw the clouds moving across the sky
But maybe it was the earth slowly turning
I felt no motion, but I am merely one soul
A tiny speck on the surface of this world
Like others before me from the beginning
Until one day when the poles may flip
Or the sun expands to swallow this place
Even then, still with a sense of movement
As nothing ever will be standing still
Yet I am moved

I hear a rhythmic beat to the rushing river
As if swollen and excited to reach the sea
The morning sun looks on as if unimpressed
Another day to witness its gentle turbulence
If it could just nod and shrug, well it would
Until one day when the poles may flip again
Or the sun expands to swallow this place
Even then, still with a sense of movement
And the universe on a quest of its own
Yet I am moved

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Not actively editing
Contest: 
Neopoem Of The Week October 23rd to October 29th 2022
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Jackweb

Tue, 2022-10-25 23:51

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The act of observing nature seems straight forward. We watch, listen and appreciate the way things are. Most times, I stare at the sky and the sun and observe it's movements and it's impact. if it could some how pause a little while. And the River as well.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Rosewood Apothecary

Wed, 2022-10-26 05:00

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I love it. I love the second stanza has the echo of the first. It’s a great technique and it definitely wraps it up nicely

Good poem,
Tim

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