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Morn awakes
Its early morning in the glittering forest and the winter lies thick on the ground
The stark towering trees mute and white
Cold wind is thick and is silent
Yet breathes frequent frozen sighs of solitude
The weary wolves slumber in their lairs
But the young cavort and frolic in the turgid chilly morn
Wide eyed eagles and somnolent owes sit motionless in the high boughs
Eternal and glorious Father
Smiles benevolently at the rise of the golden orb
The thudding mayhem of battles of yesteryear
Are replaced by a soft victors song
His steadfastness has repelled the dark enemy
All my forlorn sorrows and pain are conquered
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Comments
Debra Bryant
Mon, 2012-03-05 18:19
Morgan
I love poetry about nature and this was beautifuly written in my humble opinion. My favorite lines are "Cold wind is thick and is silent
Yet breathes frequent frozen sighs of solitude"
Loved it!
Debbie