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The moon ran for shade

Submitted by Barbara Writes on Mon, 2015-11-30 00:53

It's not so bad
but, certainly sad
to see the moon fade
running for shade
swiftly behind dark clouds.

Last few words:

Copied and pasted from notes on my iPad

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

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Comments

raj

Tue, 2015-12-01 14:38

Very vivid imagery. Regards,

Very vivid imagery.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

wesley snow

Tue, 2015-12-01 16:34

Very cute Barbara.

I like it.

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Barbara Writes

Thu, 2015-12-03 00:27

Thanks

Glad you like it. Was a quick moment I needed to jot down.

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Sparrow

Tue, 2015-12-01 19:24

When I saw the title, it brought a load of pictures and thoughts to the mind, sorry but there is a need to write more on this theme, the ideas that are on your I Pad are there just to trigger a longer piece, I shall wait for the other words to this, or shall we collaborate ???
Yours as always Ian x

An edition that needs an edit:-

I shall await your rebirth,
Then you can sing to me
Melodies of lover’s dreams
As you cruise across the sky

Let me dream some more
Bathing in your glow before I die
There held in diamonds sparkle
You let lovers meet and bathe

A whisper from eternity
Where ages of touch are held
In a peace of just being close
Let me dream some more..

Yours Ian xx

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Barbara Writes

Thu, 2015-12-03 00:25