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Leaves have palms

Submitted by Zomkhonto on Sat, 2022-05-21 08:13

Our tree-trunk souls bend in the wind to dance not yield,
And their leaves have palms,
and they clap vigorously at funerals of fallen trees.
Their leaves cup rainstorms a single drop per serving.
When time is unkind, our roots a a dishevelled mess
And the leaves fall with no funerals.

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Candlewitch

Sat, 2022-05-21 13:57

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I like your poem very much. it made me think! very clever!

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Ray Whitaker

Sat, 2022-05-21 21:55

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I am looking forward to reading more of your work.

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