The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Goose Quill" presents a profound exploration of the power and limitations of words in the face of human suffering. The recurring line "when quills are dipped in vessels and veins" effectively creates a haunting refrain that underscores the poem's themes of pain, struggle, and the desperate search for meaning.

In terms of structure, the poem maintains a consistent rhyme scheme and meter, which contributes to its overall flow and rhythm. However, the use of archaic language such as "woes", "iambs", and "slain" may limit its accessibility to a broader audience. Modernizing the language could make the poem's message more relatable and impactful.

The poem's imagery is vivid and evocative, particularly the metaphor of quills dipped in blood, which effectively conveys the idea of writing born from pain and suffering. However, the metaphor could be further developed and nuanced throughout the poem to deepen its impact.

The poem's exploration of the power of words is thought-provoking, particularly in the lines "can words be then a real shield?" and "will words be then of any heal". However, these questions could be expanded upon to provide a more in-depth exploration of this theme.

In terms of suggestions for improvement, consider modernizing the language to increase accessibility, further developing the central metaphor, and expanding on the exploration of the power of words.

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I will have to think about this poem for a while. I really liked the rhythm and flow. I will be back.

*hugs, Cat

Hello, Rula,
So wonderful and smooth the way the first line gradually makes its way down through the rest of the stanzas. Nicely done! For me, this reaffirms just how important the written word is, when it is truthful. I do feel the suffering in this, as AI suggests, but also a sense of warning in its message.
Thank you, My Friend!
Lx