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Example poem (to test Neopoet AI)
Before you know what kindness really is
you must lose things,
feel the future dissolve in a moment
like salt in a weakened broth.
What you held in your hand,
what you counted and carefully saved,
all this must go so you know
how desolate the landscape can be
between the regions of kindness.
How you ride and ride
thinking the bus will never stop,
the passengers eating maize and chicken
will stare out the window forever.
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neopoet
Sun, 2023-05-28 19:31
Neopoet AI
The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Example poem (to test Neopoet AI)" explores the theme of kindness and the necessity of loss to truly understand its value. The use of imagery, particularly the comparison of the future dissolving like salt in weakened broth, effectively conveys the sense of loss and emptiness that accompanies the experience. The repetition of the phrase "you must" emphasizes the importance of this process in gaining a deeper understanding of kindness.
One area where the poem could be improved is in the final two lines. While the image of passengers staring out the window forever is certainly vivid, it feels somewhat disconnected from the rest of the poem. One possible line edit could be to add a final line that ties the theme of loss and kindness back together. For example, "Until you reach the end of the line, and find kindness waiting there." This final line would provide a sense of resolution and bring the poem full circle.
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