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Elephants (inspired by Aesthetic Night)
Heavy memories
Elephants meandering
Through a grass less plain
Footprints fossilized
Impressions in mud and clay
Artifacts of pain
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Inspired by the way Aesthetic Night’s poem ‘Elephants!’ made me feel.
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Not Explicit Content
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U.S.A.
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Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Walt Whitman. I’m enamored by the work of lyricists such as Robert Hunter, John Barlow, John Dyer Baizley, and Tom Marshall just to name a handful.
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Candlewitch
Mon, 2023-03-20 11:15
dear Tim,
I was very interested to see your take on John's Elephants. I am glad that you kept it 'real'
* ever eddy
excellent!
*love & hugs, Cat
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RoseBlack
Mon, 2023-03-20 17:36
A great take
on a great poem! Well done!
~RoseBlack~
Jackweb
Tue, 2023-03-21 11:36
So deep!
Concisely written, with great metaphor of Elephant. This suggests something deeper... I think, this has a hidden undertone. Beautiful!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Rosewood Apothecary
Tue, 2023-03-21 11:48
Thank you
You are correct, there’s something underneath. I appreciate the comment and the read. Thank you.
Tim
author commentJackweb
Tue, 2023-03-21 12:08
You're welcome
I knew it.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Aesthetic Night
Tue, 2023-03-21 12:14
Elephants
A moving poem. When you see a young one does it make you smile.
It causes elation to see the care they receive their mothers.
Sometimes I feel a little like crying.
When the lights go out and your alone. Don't let discouragement
and loneliness get you down. Just breathe deeply and trust in
your higher power. You're okay, you'll be alright!