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Don\t Read This

Submitted by loved on Wed, 2012-02-01 11:10

Many survive on the bones
and raw flesh of corpses,
to boast and bask in the cauldrons
Where they in reality smolder…
The guffaw, the gumption they boast,
they feel the world is
about them to toast

A sullen face falls
and
when the world around does awake,
Like foxes into the forest they escape,
tails wagging below the horizon
they are actually dead
ere the new morn sunrise is arisen

None stay for everlasting immortality,
they all are found out in abundant reality,
but then the end has surfaced too
they are damned as none knew….

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Darknlovely 3436

Thu, 2012-02-09 20:26

None stay for everlasting immortality,
they all are found out in abundant reality,
but then the end has surfaced too
they are damned as none knew......this verse said it all Loved

great piece you have here..
DL

loved

Thu, 2012-02-09 23:45

loved's picture

Grateful
and
thanks for your maiden visit too ,
have a nice day
rgds

loved

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Esker

Fri, 2012-02-10 21:56

Esker's picture

the shivering and cornered
consumed

like tear stained
walls
and haunted halls

where are the knights
and angels
They are there
they are here

and the hunting goes on
and collecting
like the moon sweeping
past in the skin of nights
stretched with stars
beating to the fallen like
drumsong

everlasting immortality
now
but our species exists
we replicate
and love
hurt
die
linger
passionate
lost
found

our talismans remain
behind us like the
skulls
our burial mounds
we have
with vexed passages
of seasons

how we rise too
above immortality
to be minute and
grand in being human
with empathy
giving that gift

loved

Fri, 2012-02-10 22:48

loved's picture

What an honour
for having my page
traversed ,
by the best
Thanks
shall copy paste
and
emulate

loved

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