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Dawn

Submitted by judyanne on Sun, 2011-01-16 04:27

I awake to the ever-abiding soul song of life -
the sounds of mothers calling young in fresh near light.
While the timely rooster crows and colour spirits bestir
for control of the far horizon various hued inks fight.

Stirring to the florid smell of sated, calm earth
moisturised by Jack Frost’s recent fresh-dewed call
the distant gentle pound as ocean quenches thirsty shore
a serenity which darkness has settled over all.

Tasting tender whisperings of the wind to the leaves
and the birds’ gloriously orchestrated chorus
that’s sent to Heaven so joyously on open soaring wings
to lilt forever from the bright right eye of Horus.

Awakening to knowledge of the eternal love of Gaia
feeling Her wisdom spread, entwining everything.
As Apollo begins his journey, his slow long arching ride
this day’s Songline’s learning curves to bring
I awake to the ever-abiding soul song of life.

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judyanne

Sun, 2011-01-16 04:48

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i don't know how my reply to you got down there!!! lol
my compurer illiterate button must be turned on again :)
hugs
judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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judyanne

Sun, 2011-01-16 04:47

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thanks for the lovely welcome back and the supportive words about my write
love to you
judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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judyanne

Sun, 2011-01-16 04:43

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i have so missed you ss
i hope you've been well
thanks so much for the beautiful comment
love and big hugs
judd
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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judyanne

Sun, 2011-01-16 05:54

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lovely to see you too... i'm not back permanent yet... still having fun with my internet server
- now they're trying to get me to use the wrong modem!!!!
i wish i could give the lot of them the sack...lol

thanks for the great comment
love and hugs
judy
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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lou

Sun, 2011-01-16 05:59

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what a positive poem, i enjoyed it a lot.

love lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

judyanne

Sun, 2011-01-16 06:14

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i'm glad you enjoyed it
love judy
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'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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raj

Sun, 2011-01-16 07:02

as everyone before has said and surely everyone after me too would say...its so great to see you back...and what a lovely come back with this lively write creating the pure serene atmosphere of dawn and its moods...i thouroughly enjoyed it...

raj (sublime_ocean)

judyanne

Sun, 2011-01-16 07:54

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it's lovely to be back and be able to catch up with you all
thanks for the kind words about my write
lots 'n lots of love to you
judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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raj

Sun, 2011-01-16 15:02

may each dawn bring you peace
sunshine the warmth, and
moonbeams the bliss...

i hope your countrymen in Brisbane area are now recovering from the rage of those devastating floods...i wish them lots of courage and strength

much love n hugz..

raj (sublime_ocean)

scribbler

Sun, 2011-01-16 08:16

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the third and fourth lines are captivatingly original and the auditory,visual, and olfactory description in the rest of your poem just show how far I have yet to go.It' great to see you back if only for a while and kick your server in the butt for good measure...................stan

judyanne

Sun, 2011-01-16 08:25

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i have missed you, but i have had your book to keep me company
so i've not been totally without your words
love to you
and thank you for your usual very supportive words for me
love and hugs
judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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mona

Sun, 2011-01-16 14:38

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Judyyyyyyy:) glad to see ya again here:).

Mona Rose

Candlewitch

Sun, 2011-02-27 17:59

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Although the whole poem is stimulatingly breath taking, I really love the summing up...

Awakening to knowledge of the eternal love of Gaia
feeling Her wisdom spread, entwining everything.
As Apollo begins his journey, his slow long arching ride
this day’s Songline’s learning curves to bring
I awake to the ever-abiding soul song of life.

Love, Cat

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Nordic cloud

Sat, 2011-04-02 03:13

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And the you you are shines through this write. The attention to detail picked out with such feeling and understanding, as the great globe of earth rolls on with its accompanying songs of life that moves to wake at the break of dawn.

You have the gift of expression dear judyanne,
I send my love to you annanya.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

judyanne

Tue, 2011-05-10 06:35

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thanks so much for these lovely comments and welcome...
lol i wasn't around - embarrassed at bringing this to stream again - but wanted to acknowledge you all for the supportive words
love judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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