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The Clock Master..

The Clock Master. Set 1.

Don’t wind me up anymore he raged
at the key of sleep, I’ll stop your heart,
take your hands off without so much
as a peep.
The key ignored his screaming
round face, continuing to turn even tighter
at a more pertest pace.

Alarmingly chimed in remarking,
you’ve done it now, you‘re so dumb,
given that it’s his old works, I’ll not
get used he’ll slow the pendulum..
He being the grandfather clock in the
house of second hand chime. Where all
the clocks and watches were set minutes
or seconds behind, or in front of correct time.

Be quiet shouted number twelve don’t
you care that seven’s ill, the poor chap,
he’s exhausted from trying to climb
that horrid hill.

The hill they spoke of was the most feared
of all time true, any number trying to climb
there would face whatever that hill knew.
And believe me he knew plenty he’d been
there since the days of king Solomon wise.
And being so, you had to have a special kind
of momentum to be first claim that prize.

The prize being correct time true, that has
been a part of all man’s life since the beginning
of Earth’s journey round the sun. But believe
me getting correct time true was never going
to be, or in fact meant to be fun. Time true,
a living beat that man has measured not quite
correct, you can’t measure with machine or
dial those subtle nuances of nature, we’ve
come to expect

That the sun goes down or up inconsistently,
as we’ve learned to sleep or to be awake.
Why is man so bothered with correct time
true anyway for goodness sake.

The numbers had tried forever, to get up
the hill and correct their wandering second
hand. They were all off time true and surely
doomed to a halting as things did stand.
Neglected by the hands of man the clocks
had to become self reliant, but the truest
works of all belonged to Grandfather, and
they were giant.

Grandfather was the best timed true
but grumpiest clock in the whole house.
You’ve probably heard of him, he was
the one who chimed at one chasing off
a wriggly mouse. We clocks are not the
strongest, though some have great endurance
when seeming to run forever. The fact remains
we’d never have been here, if nature had
not made man so obsessionally clever.

Suddenly a sound, shuffling feet in strode a handsome
young gent glancing here and there with a consummate
ease. They, the clocks did not know it, but he would now
look after them, clocks indeed would become
a passion his inquiring mind to please.

Stranger they chimed a young upstart, what
right had he this room to rake, didn’t the last
human tear them apart, was he not a fake?

But Alice the slim French maid clock said she liked
his eyes, and if he’s given a chance they maybe
pleasantly surprised. Grandfather grumbled and tinkled
little knowing he would become a favourite in this man’s
care, that this would be his time in daylight away from the
darkness of under stair.

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I find this to be a brilliant piece! I'd love to see what you can do with calandars! My favorite lines are:

The fact remains
we’d never have been here, if nature had
not made man so obsessionally clever.

and my favorite clock is Grandfather! We have an old Grandmother clock in our family room. One thar has been passed down from generation to generation, I am so used to hearing it chime that I would find emptiness without it.

I have no suggestions, just appreciation for the work.
always, Cat

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Thank you Cat for your comments and your suggestions below, i will most certainly be having a good look at those you have put forward on your later comments. This is something i've just started working on and have a few more peices to put forward. So glad you enjoyed this, gives me a bit of confidance with the rest of it.

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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with a little insight
'That the sun goes down or up inconsistently,
as we’ve learned to sleep or to be awake.
Why is man so bothered with correct time
true anyway for goodness sake'goes a long way

love it roscoe - i was almost our of breath by the time i got to the end though - rather a marathon lol

'though, as the discussion is going at the moment re poetry and prose, i wonder if this is not more prose?
i don't know myself and i am trying to figure the difference, so i may be well off
whatever - i love it , great write and nothing to crit
love judy
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

on re-reading over, i think it is poetry...
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Thank you Judy i'm glad you enjoyed this, but you scare me a little calling it a marathon. This is the first of many i was hoping to post about the clock master, and i just hope i don't frighten people of by the length of each piece.
No just kidding, i've started to write it now and i couldn't stop if i wanted to. Thanks again for your comments Love Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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A little something in the same vein that I think you might enjoy:

Antiquity

time unrelenting
personal passage
minutes movements
marked

Calendars...

pretty pictures
numbers of precision
pristine white pages
visual reminders...

Clocks...

ticking away measured lifetimes
bated, dated, bar-coded
scissors move to cut the threads...

(by me)
always, Cat

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I am happy I read this! I've been looking for more story-telling in poetry because the combination is the most AMAZING thing ! My FAVORITE part is the whole 7th entry .. It shows the struggle to gain control after being left without help. At least that's what I get from it. Really enjoyed reading this! THANKS
PRECIOUS

Alone we shall find our ways into worlds of never imagined discoveries

Thank you for your time and comments. Love Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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puts me in mind of an Alice in Wonderland type write, only it is poetry, and yes, is does tell a story. It is a little long, but it held my attention right from the very start. shows a lot of the emotions that humans feel. Fear, apprehension, distain and the struggles in life.

Linda

He who conquers self , has won a great battle

Thank you for your comments, and it's longer than you think i'm afraid. This is set one, i'm working on set three. So be prepared. Love Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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