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To be happy.
Yes, really happy,
Gratuitous, unearned happiness
Yes I am happy.
It shakes me to my core
Perhaps frisson or tremble is a better word
It is rare
It is precious
I am delighted
And…
Above all
Perhaps the perfect thing,
I don’t fear its inevitable ending.
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Ian.T
Fri, 2013-10-04 03:46
Jess ,
A simple piece that carries a mood that I hope is infectious,
It is great to be happy, we shall not worry about it's inevitable end we will enjoy it while it is here,
Yours as always Ian.T
.
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
weirdelf
Fri, 2013-10-04 07:38
not all my infections are safe
but as far as I know happiness doesn't spread herpes or aids yet. No doubt the Chemical Warfare branch of the Catholic church is working on it.
cheers,
Jess
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loved
Fri, 2013-10-04 21:49
I observe a marked
sense of improved humor
I thought you only used
a guillotine
to practice on my neck
but happiness can be contagious
if it makes any difference
loved
Ian.T
Sun, 2013-10-06 04:14
Jess
That Lonnie what is he on about Tail is that a typo or what????
Oxtail soup now there's a nice piece of tail, I wish he wouldn't talk in riddles there are enough vague poetic statements here as it is.
I was thinking about age things this morning like kisses, memory and many other things that become vague, I hope someone would let me know what happened to all those simply nice things I have a vague recollection of, even smiling LOL.
Take care Yours as always Ian.T
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
weirdelf
Fri, 2013-10-04 07:39
thanks
though I presume you read the last line.
cheers,
Jess
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Rula
Fri, 2013-10-04 07:46
an uplifting poem jess
Good for you.
I'd re-arrange the first three lines with a few changes for a more logical consistancy.
Yes, I am happy.
Really happy!
( A)Gratuitous, unearned happiness..............I liked the word "gratuitious"
You make me feel happy too
.
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weirdelf
Fri, 2013-10-04 07:41
thanks Rula,
I am unclear about your suggestions
cheers,
Jess
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Rula
Fri, 2013-10-04 07:47
any clearer now?
after using the advanced formating
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weirdelf
Fri, 2013-10-04 08:45
clearer
thanks.
Something interesting. Do you realise there was more a political/ideological content in that suggestion than a poetical one?
cheers,
Jess
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Rula
Fri, 2013-10-04 09:00
To be quite honest
I only cared for the logical consistancy when I suggested the re-arrangement of those lines
You might like to tell me how!
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Lonnie
Fri, 2013-10-04 08:12
Well done
Glad to see the mood change, and I hope it brings you more peace of mind!
weirdelf
Fri, 2013-10-04 10:16
thanks lonnie
seems a strange incongruency to work for peace of mind,eh
cheers,
Jess
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Lonnie
Fri, 2013-10-04 19:30
Uh-huh
You mean as opposed to a piece of tail? LOL!!
Kailashana2
Fri, 2013-10-04 16:01
Indeed.
Indeed.
Joy is infectious. I am delirious.
~
weirdelf
Wed, 2013-10-09 06:26
hahah!
As an intrinsic atheist as I am I knew we had a connection.
cheers,
Jess
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Esker
Sat, 2013-10-05 21:05
Great Smile Mate!
a dazzler!
thank you!
Eduardo Cruz
Tue, 2013-10-08 15:14
Jess,
Interesting to see you have a mild emotional side, I am interested to see more writing of this nature from you.
"The cat is out of the bag!"
Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
weirdelf
Wed, 2013-10-09 06:28
thanks Steven and Eddie
yeah, it's quite a big change for me. Maybe even more to come,
cheers,
Jess
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