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In this bathtub

this bathtub
I trace over my skin
And let the water free me

In this bathtub
I am inhumanly gorgeous
And I do not know why

In this bathtub
I scrub my past away
But by the time I'm dressed
She's back

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Firstly, Welcome to Neopoet, I look forward to reading more of your work this is a cracking first post I love it, I like the idea that a bath can wash off all the ugly that life layers on us, to be renewed sigh if only it was so easy.

Kind Regards Seren (Director of Community Outreach) if you need anything at all don't hesitate to ask.

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Btw one of my grandmothers' maiden names was Brewer :)

*Smiles*

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

I’ve an uninhibited friend who has a claw foot tub right out in her yard and she’s not shy under the moon. This reminds me of her.

Welcome to neopoet,
Tim

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