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Submitted by Esker on Thu, 2011-02-24 15:31

speak not the name
for the dead hear
and stir gentle
in the wake

but raise the oars
soft on hallowed
lake

and gentle
for the shore
make

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Esker

Thu, 2011-02-24 16:15

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I of viking heritage
north scotland
and ojibway
the spiritual fires

the lore of the lake

thank you for you consideration
I like your changes

thank you

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whitetea

Fri, 2011-02-25 05:45

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shalom

Geezer

Fri, 2011-02-25 10:47

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The prayer we all utter, when we are alone with our grief. I like the changes too. Nothing else to add. ~ Gee

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