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At times I feel
the power of drugs
be it kids stuff
or
docs medicine
overpowers some
and
words flow as if from no where
mind vomits its hidden essence
as the stomach churns
then we feel all inside out burns
god knows
who did what and when
many can't even say amen
but your thoughts are no omen
they come alive like lightning eyes
and
shear guys minds
my greatest one over here..
hope you do still hear
if not endear...
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Rula
Thu, 2013-08-01 15:44
A good
Capture of truth. I like it with all the live imagery.
Thanks for sharing.
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loved
Thu, 2013-08-01 16:15
so nice of you
to come by
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Rula
Thu, 2013-08-01 16:20
forgive my idleness
but you must know you are always read
Keep up those captures coming true from your pen
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loved
Thu, 2013-08-01 19:01
i like your assurance
thanks Rula
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Ian.T
Fri, 2013-08-02 03:42
Loved
You are not promoting drugs
Or prescription pills to allow one to write??
I hope not lol.
It's a good theme though I was only saying a moment ago about the lengths some go to be able to write.
It makes me wonder sometimes where the words come from or who wrote them if these extremes are gone to.
I will say no more incase I put my foot in it. lol.
Good write though, don't forget NO advertising on Neopoet it's forbidden LOL, Yours as always Ian.T
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
loved
Fri, 2013-08-02 09:43
hahahhaha
this was a comment here
on some poet
hahahahaa u did not catch me
this time
no drugs promotion
don't share mine
have yours own thine
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mand
Tue, 2013-08-20 13:26
So far, I haven't had any
So far, I haven't had any drugs ( except to control my eye disorder ). But I know my son used drugs when he was in his late teens early /twenties. What you have describled follows his discription. " they come alive like lightning eyes". Going on what he says, drugs can be overpowering especially in their ability to get you to want more but they also take the balance of mind away.
My father-in-law was taking prescription drugs - hallucinations where par for the course. I guess they highten the imagination". In the end he didn't know what was real and what wasn't - a nice place for him as he was in so much pain.
I think this was a very good descriptive piece, open and honest.
Love Mand xxxx
loved
Tue, 2013-08-20 13:46
" they come alive like lightning eyes"
You are well accomplished
and gracious too
Mand
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loved
Tue, 2013-08-20 13:48
" they come alive like lightning eyes"
I didn't realize
you had quoted my eyes
you indeed are wise
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