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disillusion
a long cold season of gray
suddenly
a sunbeam pierces the clouds
why did I not expect it?
maybe predisposition
continually succumbing
to disillusion
but then, THWACK!
smacked blindside
once again,
ambushed by
eureka, joy,
and a boisterous
hallelujah
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Comments
crypticbard
Tue, 2013-01-29 07:20
nice twist
if only disillusionment where always a pleasant surprise. Or was that boisterous hallelujah a tad sarcastic. I hope not. I am operating from a sleep-deprived point of view. It was still an engaging read, what with the THWACKS, piercing sunbeams and eurekas! Thanks for sharing.
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brittle light
Tue, 2013-02-05 17:45
maybe re-read this someday
see if it strikes you another way
glad to see you reappear here
your work is unique...a great voice
thanks
Al