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Doors
Doors close to us at every turn,
And others open so we learn.
Not a simultaneous event.
A good portion of our time thus spent,
In life's hallways near and far,
Looking for the door ajar.
Style / type:
Structured: Western
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Thu, 2013-01-10 02:13
Nice
Many people are not fond of short poems, but I love it, in fact I believe shorter poems can make a bigger impact. It's amazing how it's just a few lines, but it ultimately tells everyone's life story. I hope I am interpreting correctly. Very good work.
captjack
Thu, 2013-01-10 15:58
Doors
Hi,
Thanks for the read and comments. Your right on the button in interpreting this effort.
Thanks again.
Gerry
Gerald Walsh
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Thu, 2013-01-10 20:07
Hi Jack
Indeed a short poem can often be all that's needed to convey what one intends. (plus less chance of typos lol).I think too many rush down the hallways too quickly to notice all the doors which are open just a crack..................stan