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Sundial
Sundial
Before time,
as we have come
to know it
a shadow
pinpointed
not only the hour
but the direction
of our destiny.
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Goodnight Mrs. Calabash, wherever you are.
Editing stage:
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Comments
scribbler
Sun, 2010-12-19 18:00
sundial
I think the title very apt, However the body of the poem seems to extend far beyond the message contained. I would suggest a shorter version to add to the impact LMAO................scribbler
jetz
Mon, 2010-12-20 07:36
Stan,
I have missed your wit.
I guess this new format will take some getting used to.
Sue
Kailashana2
Mon, 2010-12-20 07:58
Niiice!
Niiice!
~A
p.s. Please forgive me my penchant for florid mispelings.