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Wow !What Neighbours
We have loveliest of neighbours
they keep daggers hidden
beneath the bushes
and
hope to strike,
is if unknowingly
they strive to thieve
and
We try to brief
do not be so greedy
they are otherwise nice,
but they know not,
what they do...
how I wish our father
since gone away knew
some are the scum today,
out to bring harm all your way
what damn associates
did you say?
they alone now do betray.
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Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
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Comments
Candlewitch
Mon, 2012-03-26 12:03
Dear Loved,
I can appreciate what you have written here. I have great neighbors on our right side. We exchange baked goods and chat often. On the left we have disorderly and loud people who have no consideration for anyone.
always, Cat
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loved
Sun, 2012-03-18 14:03
At least one thing we have in common
rude neighbours
uncouth ..
loved
Willy
Sun, 2012-03-18 19:23
LOVELY NEIGHBOURS
Dear Loved,
There is this very visible thread of irony in your piece: lovely Neighbours to begin with but by the end they were betrayers.............but if the truth be told the neighbourly bond that once existed (where you virtually looked out for your neighbour; where his children respected you and you could discipline them with no fear) is gone.....it is more like i just happen to be living near you and that's it; its more like overt exhibitions of materialism and foolish pride........delinquency, pollution...........!
Always Willy
loved
Sun, 2012-03-18 22:37
Wonderful
Wonderful
evaluation yours,
the truth is out
and
we must accept change,
as of now
and
not of the yester-years when a neighbor, was,
as you rightly put across,
irony is the consequence..
Thank you Willy,
for passing by
it gives me strength
loved
scribbler
Sun, 2012-03-18 22:46
Hi Loved
Did you mean to say "mean AS if......" in L-5?
Yes a bad neighbor can be a real pain. I guess Frost was right in saying good fences make good neighbors lol......stan
loved
Sun, 2012-03-18 22:52
Your analysis is uncallengeable Stan, mean what you mean
Thanks Stan
you are the only solid ,
bold i mean , (as in meant)
man
loved