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i can not love you more
i can not love you more
than i have loved you
for i have loved you long
and held your love so dearly
in my heart of hearts but now
my eyes have opened
to find my heart in mourning
and when the first bird
sings outside my bedroom window
he sings a sorrowful song
for you have found me lacking
though i can not understand
the how and why of it
and yet my love for you
was gentle and long suffering
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faithmairee
Sat, 2011-06-11 23:38
Thank you, Ian
So nice to see you stopped by. Thank you for your comments. I appreciate them.
Love,
Faith
There must be a poem in here somewhere.
faithmairee
Sat, 2011-06-11 23:40
Thank you so much
Rosi-Thank you for your wonderful remarks. Thank you for being here.
Love,
Faith
There must be a poem in here somewhere.
Pamela A. Lamppa
Mon, 2011-06-20 20:50
an age old topic that always makes for a poem or two
This is a sad listing of the emotions we go through during any kind of loss. But the good thing is, there is always a never ending supply of love. And we are never lacking - we just haven't quite been discovered yet.
This too shall pass.
Love is an age old topic that always makes for a poem or two.
~Pamela
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faithmairee
Mon, 2011-06-20 20:55
Thank you
Thank you for your wonderful remarks and for taking the time to respond to my poem. I really appreciate it.
Love-Faith
There must be a poem in here somewhere.
Nichole
Wed, 2011-11-02 22:48
Awwww
Sounds as though you have been through heartbreak. I like this poem a lot as well.
Beautifully written, i wish i could write this well. Mine are normally about love, lost love and emotions or animals. I enjoyed this one.
Nichole
faithmairee
Thu, 2011-11-03 12:41
Thank you so much
Nichole, Thanks for your kind words. I appreciate them and thank you for commenting on my heartbreak poem.
Faith
P.S. I just went and read some of your work and think you write quite well yourself.
There must be a poem in here somewhere.
Nichole
Fri, 2011-11-04 00:19
Awwww
Thank you so much for reading my work.
It was a pleasure reading yours.
Your very welcome for my comments.
And i am very very thankful for your kind PS you left for me.
That meant a lot to me.
Keep up the good writes :)
Nichole
loved
Fri, 2011-11-04 13:11
They say
The concept of grief has changed
In this small poem
GRIEF MODERNISED
Grieve not for my loss
Also do not mourn
Each morn
Just believe me and say
Twas good
I'd loved and lived some day
And
The wind did blow me away
Like a candle of sorts
That’s just by the way.
Grieve not hence for me
From this moment
This day
I beseech you
If you love me
The same way
loved