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forever yours
should the moon
retreat forever
behind a darkened sky
and all the stars
fall earthbound
without their
twinkling light
if the sun should
cease to rise
the clouds go
their separate ways
and all the birds
no longer soar
i still will
not forget you
for, in all truth
i am forever yours
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Candlewitch
Tue, 2011-06-21 11:15
Dear Faithmariee,
A lovely piece of devotion. I wish I had written it!
always, Cat
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faithmairee
Tue, 2011-06-21 23:43
Dear Cat
I'm honored you feel that way. I've always admired and respected you so I'm humbled as well. Thank you, Dear Lady!
Love,
Faith
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raj
Tue, 2011-06-21 14:42
Dear Faith
a lovely dedication for a loved one expressing unconditional love..
much love..
raj (sublime_ocean)
faithmairee
Tue, 2011-06-21 23:44
Dear Raj
Thank you so much for your wonderful remarks. I appreciate them very much.
Love,
Faith
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Eduardo Cruz
Wed, 2011-06-22 00:43
faith
It seems that you like to write in 'enjambment" good stuff here, I enjoyed it much!
Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
Eduardo Cruz
Wed, 2011-06-22 00:46
faith come join my workshop
You will enjoy it, and have loads of fun with our group.
Eddie
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