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The odd ordinance awed Odin's ends only to oddly OD on awe when all asked did the audience kill Art?
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Audiences killed Art?
By: Fortune Motsabi
Tentacles of time titillate determined tapestries terminals tunneled internally towards termination of self determination. Follow us for followers is the fall of was the cat dead or alive? Where thinking out of the box bares a juxtaposition of logic and Inglis Brian's scientism, balanced only by frail stringent empaths on shakey stills of Copenhagen interpretations, precipitated overtly by observation that leads to murder. Was the culprit Curiosity, or was or was it the cure in while sitting? Juggling this impotent silence over the flame that strung time along just to birth death that do be proud as life in an opened closed box, segmented across contrasting worlds, where determination depends not on the observer but determination itself. Is the cat dead or alive? The catastrophe of this cataclysm catacomb the catalyst while pussy footing about the exhibition chair wondering, is Duchamp's Wheel, art or trash? The odd ordinance awed Odin's ends, only to oddly OD on awe when all asked, did the audience kill Art?
By: Fortune Motsabi
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Mon, 2024-10-21 15:20
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
This poem is a complex piece that employs a range of literary techniques and references. It seems to be exploring the themes of art, perception, and the nature of existence, with a particular focus on the concept of Schrödinger's cat, a thought experiment in quantum mechanics.
The poem's language is rich and dense, filled with alliteration and internal rhyme. This creates a rhythmic, almost hypnotic effect that draws the reader in. However, the complexity of the language and the abstractness of the concepts being explored may make the poem difficult for some readers to fully understand.
The poem could benefit from a clearer narrative or thematic thread to guide the reader through its ideas. As it stands, the poem jumps between different images and concepts, which can be disorienting. For instance, the transition from "the fall of was the cat dead or alive?" to "Inglis Brian's scientism" is abrupt and confusing.
The poem also contains several ambiguous phrases, such as "the cure in while sitting" and "juggling this impotent silence over the flame." While ambiguity can add depth to a poem, in this case, it contributes to the overall sense of confusion.
The use of questions throughout the poem is effective in engaging the reader and encouraging them to think more deeply about the poem's themes. However, the final question, "did the audience kill Art?" could be more impactful if it were set up more clearly in the preceding lines. As it stands, it feels somewhat disconnected from the rest of the poem.
In conclusion, this poem has a lot of potential and contains some interesting ideas and effective literary techniques. However, it could benefit from a clearer structure and more accessible language to help guide the reader through its complex themes.
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