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Oh wonderful sky

Oh wonderful vastness,
Perfect sky.
Perspiration vessel,
Beauty that makes me cry.

Clouds so fluffy,
Pillows of joy,
Create artist’s landscape,
We visually enjoy.

And when I sit,
Taking time to wonder.
At the shapes,
In your vastness yonder.

I’m left so grateful,
For the sky you are.
Amazing and wonderful,
The greatest gift by far.

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Structured: Western
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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Oh wonderful sky" captures the awe and appreciation for the beauty of the sky. The imagery of the clouds as "pillows of joy" and the sky as a "perspiration vessel" adds a unique perspective to the poem. The use of descriptive language helps to create a vivid picture of the sky and its impact on the speaker.

One suggestion for improvement would be to consider varying the rhyme scheme or adding more complex poetic devices to enhance the overall structure and depth of the poem. Currently, the poem follows a consistent AABB rhyme scheme, which can make the poem feel predictable and less engaging. Experimenting with different rhyme patterns or incorporating other poetic devices, such as metaphors or similes, could add more layers of meaning to the poem.

Additionally, the poem could benefit from further exploration of the emotions and personal connection to the sky. While the speaker expresses gratitude and wonder, delving deeper into the specific reasons behind these feelings could strengthen the emotional impact of the poem.

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Lovely! It flowed so freely and eloquently - just as a poem about love for the sky should!
Thank you,

Thanks for your feedback.
I love your poetry, and do always appreciate your feedback.
I often feel as if the bot doesn’t quite get poetry.

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And I also feel that AI doesn't seem to understand poetry very well.
Thank you again, for such a graceful poem!

Got a great flow. It’s a breezy read and the feeling is lighthearted and uplifting. Keep your head up.


Thank you for your feedback, much appreciated.

Sometimes it is good to pen a poem that isn’t as full on or heavy, as other poems I have written.

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