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Dear AI

You are one screwy dude
Tried but not trued
Some hold you near and dear
Some think you all about fear

To some you are helpful
as well as thoughtful,
but others will see soon,
you leave no thought room

You are not for the fearful
For them you are their earful
Information watershed
Brains emptied - they had bled!

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Dear AI" presents a satirical perspective on Artificial Intelligence, exploring both its benefits and potential drawbacks.

The structure of the poem is consistent, with a four-line stanza format and an AABB rhyme scheme. This consistency helps to maintain the rhythm and flow of the poem. However, the meter within each line varies, which can disrupt the rhythm. To improve this, consider revising the poem to have a consistent meter within each line.

The language used in the poem is straightforward and accessible, which helps to convey the message clearly. The use of colloquial language, such as "screwy dude" and "tried but not trued", adds a unique voice to the poem. However, these phrases may not be understood by all readers. Consider revising these phrases to ensure the poem's message is clear to a wider audience.

The poem effectively uses imagery to convey its message, such as "information watershed" and "brains emptied - they had bled". These images help to illustrate the potential negative effects of AI. However, the poem could benefit from more positive imagery to balance the negative and create a more nuanced view of AI.

The poem's theme of AI is timely and relevant, and its satirical perspective adds an interesting twist. However, the poem could benefit from a clearer exploration of this theme. Consider expanding on the benefits and drawbacks of AI, and how these impact different people, to provide a more in-depth exploration of the theme.

Overall, the poem "Dear AI" is an interesting exploration of a relevant theme, with a unique voice and effective use of imagery. With some revisions to the meter, language, and exploration of the theme, the poem could be further improved.

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thank you for posting this poem. I greatly enjoyed it. very creative, I applaud you!

*hugs, Cat

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Thanks for being so kind,
Mark

"Ghosts of electricity howl in the bones of her face."
~Bob Dylan~

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