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Traffic in a Light Rain
Visibility obscured
Windshield collects droplets
Cares, like facets on rubies
paint this pointillist indifference
A galaxy of crimson stars
Mundane beauty
Intermittently wiped away
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Sometimes I’m not robotic
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Rula
Sun, 2023-01-08 00:50
raw beautiful imagery
so real and well painted.
thank you for sharing Tim.
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Candlewitch
Sun, 2023-01-08 07:45
hey Tim,
good enough to read twice ! I still marvel at the way your mind works! this is a real gem of a poem. I think you should enter it as poem of the week!
*hugs, Cat
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Rula
Sun, 2023-01-08 08:08
Come back to say
Just noticed and very much liked the paradox in the title. I am not sure if it is intentional, but thought it is so clever.
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Rosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2023-01-08 11:04
Thanks
You always make me feel valid. This is the best online community I’ve been a part of. Thanks for helping me change my habits and giving me such great feedback. I am proud of this one.
Thanks a million
Tim
Lavender
Sun, 2023-01-08 12:49
Traffic in a Light Rain
Hi, Tim,
I could get lost in this quiet setting with its simple beauty, and refreshed each time the cares are wiped away.
L
Dreamwarrior
Sat, 2023-01-14 13:59
Excellent
My friend, I so loved this. Taking something so ordinary and rendering it into such a beautiful encapsulation of the world around us that often goes unnoticed, is just an amazing tribute to all such hidden beauty.
Really great work my friend.
Loved it.
Thanks for sharing.
Rosewood Apothecary
Sat, 2023-01-14 18:11
Thank you so much
I’m glad you appreciated this.
“Once in awhile you’ll get shown the light
In the strangest of places
If you look at it right”
Tim
Dreamwarrior
Sat, 2023-01-14 17:34
So True
I agree 100% my friend. If yer open to the hidden way that poetry manifests itself, then it's amazing the things you can turn into literary classics.