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Rock (one line for Imagery workshop)
That rock is broken off yet still part of Earth.
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jane210660
Mon, 2017-06-26 08:38
Hard labour
I see broken rocks and get a picture of men in shackles both breaking and being broken.
Probably had too much caffeine......
Jx
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weirdelf
Mon, 2017-06-26 08:45
Always great when people see things I don't in what I write
even in one line.
I take it as a great compliment.
What if I added an adjective, like lichenous or even worn before rock?
ta
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jane210660
Mon, 2017-06-26 09:13
Ah well, one word changes all.
If you add lichenous, I see Dartmoor. A collection of sun dappled granite rocks all covered in lichens.
If you add worn, I see the limestone pavement above Malham in N. Yorks. It's quite a famous geological feature have a google.
Jx
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scribbler
Mon, 2017-06-26 10:20
remind me
Of a tallus slope in the western mountains
weirdelf
Mon, 2017-06-26 10:28
cool!
cool!
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Presume you meant reminds
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wesley snow
Mon, 2017-06-26 17:51
Strange.
My knee jerk response was to see the Moon. Broken off from us, but still a stone that is part of Earth.
I know that was not your intention, but it's what I saw.
Strange.
W. H. Snow
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Sparrow
Mon, 2017-06-26 19:08
Rock
Layered time fossilized remains of natures history,
a truth of before, lines laid out to dazzle the sceptics..
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weirdelf
Tue, 2017-06-27 01:39
Forgive me for not replying individually, Mark, Wes and Ian
I appreciate all your interpretations.
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Sparrow
Tue, 2017-06-27 03:31
Jess
A great subject, I forgot that lovely red sweet, with the name of the seaside resort running through the middle..
Thanks for all you do,
Yours Ian..
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