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Circling the Wagons
When life kicks our ass
my love, we know it's time to
circle the wagons.
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
judyanne
Fri, 2016-07-01 10:06
good senryu
Made me smile... that's what a good senryu does...
love judy
xxx
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