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A Poetic Dream
I want to be a great poet
Make you think and ask questions
Seek the answer to know it
Beautiful poems I want to write
Deep in your heart I want to touch
Bring what I see into your site
Can I get you to laugh and cry
Write my poetry on your mind
I want to write with conviction
To be able tell stories of rhyme
That makes me have to consider
How to write every line
With words new things I will try
Invoke an emotion inside
So you have an experience
Lay it all out on the line
To all the poets of the world
The masters of this very gift
I want to learn to write from you
And give my poetry a lift
So Edger Allen Poe will teach
Shakespeare will educate too
Wordology I will seek
Then be a master among the few
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Editing stage:
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Comments
weirdelf
Mon, 2012-11-12 07:36
You and me too!
This is a poet's poem, all our dream, and not just a dream.
You are in the right place.
cheers,
Jess
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bossladyone
Mon, 2012-11-12 09:36
Jess
Thank you so much
emeka ozurumba
Sat, 2014-05-17 11:08
your poetic standards are not
your poetic standards are not so menacing, they need to be, your writes are too genuine not too artistic
bossladyone
Thu, 2014-05-22 18:23
Emeka
Thank you. I don't know how to be anything else
raj
Mon, 2014-05-26 14:26
A shift in style of your
A shift in style of your writing and expressing in this poem is pretty novel and the Title fits it like a glove...To add to the comment of Jess I would say you are not just in the right place but also on the right path...keep writing so simplistically beautiful...
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
bossladyone
Thu, 2014-05-29 13:41
A shift in style of your
Thank you so much
Ian.T
Mon, 2014-05-26 18:56
Lady
A good write, know that you are a poet on a collision course with a workshop, a place to learn, with friends that care.
Here the universe we will share..
Just take care with the odd English word as in this line,:- "Bring what I see into your site" ..I am sure you meant sight not a place to be such as a site, bear/ bare, with me these things are there to trip you up.
Take care and I look forward to your next write, right !!
Yours Ian.T / Tee /Tea
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
bossladyone
Thu, 2014-05-29 13:42
Ian.T
Thank you so much you are the first to point that mistake out. Thank you for the edit.
Ian.T
Fri, 2014-06-20 18:58
Young Lady
There are more poets on Earth at this moment than there has ever been.
Years past only the few such as priests and Monks etc. could read or write so most of the best words in poetic ways had to be sung or learned from those that could read.
I remember our town of Westbury where I went to senior school, there was a church there that was 600 years old plus or minus a few years, it was unique in that it had inside one of the two only copies of the Bible that were called the "Chained Bibles" they were chained to the lectern so that no one could remove them from the church, in those days they were really unique, but I don't think there were many around that could read anyway.
My home city is Salisbury that use to be a Hill Fort called Sarum,
The original Cathedral was built up on the top, the base of it is still there if you are ever here to see, it became obsolete up on that hill fort so they built another down on the Valley floor it was built in around 1200 or so, the old one was taken down eventually and the stones were used to build a wall around the new one.
This building had a square tower and later they added a stone spire that made the building 402 feet tall.
I was brought up with lots of history around me even Stonehenge was just down the road.
My accent then was Wiltshire, as in America there are so many different ways of saying things.
So now that all of us write in mostly English we just have to watch out for those strange words we have that sound the same but are spelt differently, and mean something different, it takes a lot of reading to pick these things up as the spell checker accepts them as they are, good luck with our strange language lol, Have a lovely day out there,
Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
emeka ozurumba
Tue, 2014-05-27 10:44
in the first stanza you could
in the first stanza you could start with a form like '" a poetess beguile" shortened but compact,the compacting ability is what the genre is revered for
bossladyone
Thu, 2014-05-29 13:45
Thank you so much for your insight
Thank you so much for your insight
scribbler
Thu, 2014-05-29 22:49
Hi Boss
I reckon we all strive to one day be included with such poets as you mentioned. Thanks for posting......stan
bossladyone
Fri, 2014-06-20 18:28
scibbler
yes I suppose we do.