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GIFT OF NATURE

Submitted by Jackweb on Sun, 2022-10-09 13:55

The mother earth is adorned with wonderful trees,
with green leaves dancing round about,
the sweet breeze smiling genuinely good,
and the giant mountain wilderness stands erect.

the gift of nature is devine embellishments,
it's beautification is the architectural hand of God,
the beautiful azure sky hanging above in greatness,
and the sun alone electrifying the entire cosmos.

the gift of nature is one the greatest expression of love,
and it is heartily proven by the visible things we've seen,
look around and see the fertility of a vast land,
the wide oceans and the sparkling streams.

The dense forests and the wide range of mountains,
the animals, birds and the insects that be.
if there's no evidence of a living God without no creation,
would all these have come to be?

©® ONYINYECHI COSMOS ETU

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Neopoem Of The Week Contest October 9th to October 15th 2022
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Lavender

Sun, 2022-10-09 17:54

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Hi, Jackweb,
Mother Earth is beyond our intelligence...perfection in every way. Your poem shows gratitude and respect for our beautiful planet. I like your title a lot - it all is truly a gift.
Thank you!
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Jackweb

Sun, 2022-10-09 18:10

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Thanks a bunch for reading and commenting.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Rosewood Apothecary

Sun, 2022-10-09 21:16

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Very beautiful observational poetry. I’m very fond of it. I’m an atheist in regards to organized religion but you may find me reviving communion amongst the trees in the forest near my home.

Nice job,
Tim

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Sun, 2022-10-09 21:16

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Very beautiful observational poetry. I’m very fond of it. I’m an atheist in regards to organized religion but you may find me reviving communion amongst the trees in the forest near my home.

Nice job,
Tim

Jackweb

Sun, 2022-10-09 23:06

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Thank you so much for reading and commenting.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Geezer

Sat, 2022-10-15 09:58

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echo the comments that have been made previously. I like your title; the body of the poem is pretty good, and I think that your understanding of English grows with every post. A couple of things I would pay particular importance to:

1]. leaves, instead of [leafs]
2]. I would use [evidence] instead of [existence].

~ Geez.
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Jackweb

Sat, 2022-10-15 10:05

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Much appreciated esteemed poet - Geezeer! Will edit right away!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Geezer

Sat, 2022-10-15 10:16

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Two thumbs up!
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Jackweb

Sat, 2022-10-15 17:02

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Have a great weekend!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Kristen H.

Sat, 2022-10-15 23:18

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Congratulations on the win! Well deserved! This is a beautiful poem.

Jackweb

Sun, 2022-10-16 00:49

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Thank you so much dear poet!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Rosewood Apothecary

Sun, 2022-10-16 06:32

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Deserving. Great poem my friend.

Tim

Jackweb

Sun, 2022-10-16 06:46

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Thanks so much precious sister and respected poet!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Geezer

Sun, 2022-10-16 09:32

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Well-deserved win. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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Jackweb

Sun, 2022-10-16 10:46

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Very much Geezer!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Ifeanyichukwu O...

Sun, 2022-10-16 12:39

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Jackweb, congratulations on this win. Well-deserved. Keep improving and keep winning.

Ifeanyichukwu O...

Sun, 2022-10-16 12:40

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Jackweb, congratulations on this win. Well-deserved. Keep improving and keep winning.

Jackweb

Sun, 2022-10-16 12:52

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Thanks so much!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Eftichia1

Sun, 2022-10-16 13:03

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Congrats my friend !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Beauty poem

Jackweb

Sun, 2022-10-16 15:02

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Thanks!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Lavender

Sun, 2022-10-16 18:12

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Well done!
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Jackweb

Sun, 2022-10-16 22:01

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Much appreciated esteemed poet.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Celso G. Tertins

Mon, 2022-10-17 22:14

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reminds me a bit of joyce kilmer's poem, trees. but this poem feels more about a vast beautiful country with many diverse lands in it. a showcase of earthly beauty.

Seren

Sun, 2023-02-05 09:23

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On a very fine poem and the win!

I would edit the format some but other than that I see nothing to critique

Kind regards Seren

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Jackweb

Sun, 2023-02-05 11:21

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so much for reading and commenting. I'm glad you liked it
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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