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AVIARY GUEST

Submitted by Esker on Wed, 2011-11-30 14:13

night
slender as wings
let them
sleek rest
against the
soul

and winter settles
like a dream
falling slow in motion

I can stay aside with
you forever
watching this city
becoming light
the whisper
of histories
rising
with shadows

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Editing - rough draft

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Esker

Wed, 2011-11-30 14:13

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whom have kept
routes
and hearts
from the precipice

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Geremia

Wed, 2011-11-30 14:35

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The imagery borders on the sureal and produces surprising and wonderful flashes of "another truth"

joe

Esker

Wed, 2011-11-30 14:44

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there are other "Truths" I have felt them brush against me!

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Geremia

Wed, 2011-11-30 14:48

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In October I almost died. Yes, I have seen "other truths."

joe

wesley snow

Wed, 2011-11-30 14:50

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It's still free verse. It still doesn't rhyme. But it's growing on me. This is rather lovely. wesley

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Nordic cloud

Mon, 2011-12-05 10:34

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Your use of words
seduces our feelings and sensibilities
into knowing the exact atmosphere you wish to conjure up
within the poem;
things historic becoming darker
than the present whiteness,
rising,
you magical magician of words Steven.

Love from Anninatrance.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

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