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manifesto 1
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time is emotion
stitched within an illusion
named separation
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Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Candlewitch
Wed, 2012-04-18 12:14
Dear Judy,
A significant message within your haiku! You packed alot of meaning into few words and lines. I have no suggestions, only a deep appreciation for the work.
always, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
judyanne
Thu, 2012-04-19 22:49
hi cat
thanks so much for the supportive comments
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
MDT
Wed, 2012-04-18 14:31
HI
i love this, the less said the more room for thought...love it...thanks.
Peace love and harmony light the path we must take. - MDT
judyanne
Thu, 2012-04-19 22:50
thank you very much
for the very kind comments
love judy
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
emogothgirl
Wed, 2012-04-18 22:10
well judy
i just gained a lot more respect for you; i CANNOT write in haiku! so yay for you! i think it said just enough, nicely done.
always,
mag
judyanne
Thu, 2012-04-19 22:51
thank you very much maggie mae
that is a lovely thing to say
love judy
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Cloudthings
Wed, 2012-04-18 23:31
so much thinking rushed in where you used those few words to ope
MDT said it perfectly... so much thinking rushed in where you used those few words to open doors & sweep passages clear.... just wonderful... still whirling with it!
Anni xx
Cheers
Anni
My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"
judyanne
Thu, 2012-04-19 22:52
thanks anni
so glad it hit a spot
love judy
xxxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Roscoe Lane
Thu, 2012-04-19 03:16
Don't write,
Don't write Haiku's, but the way this glides amongst the brain cells is perfect. Regards Roscoe..
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
judyanne
Thu, 2012-04-19 22:52
thanks roscoe
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Nordic cloud
Thu, 2012-04-19 10:51
This is so...so...isn't it ?
This is so...so...isn't it ?
A fascinating evocative set of words
that says something in a new way so well judyanne
a gem.
annanya.x
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
judyanne
Thu, 2012-04-19 22:53
annanya
thank you very much for the supportife comments
love judyanne
xxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
loved
Thu, 2012-04-19 11:14
NICE HAIKU
nice haiku
filled with emotion
no commotion
no illusion
loved
judyanne
Thu, 2012-04-19 22:54
thanks loved
xxx
hugs
judy
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
loved
Fri, 2012-04-20 01:08
just great
some more comments
would love from you
loved
pleiades
Fri, 2012-04-20 10:05
i usually can't stand these
i usually can't stand these kind
of writes ...they often seem to be a single thought masquerading
as something poetic
however!
this write stopped me in my tracks
i read it, felt i'd just read some kind of profound truth. this write
impacted upon me, and for some strange reason, makes me think
of death
but not in any morbid, creepy way ... just makes me think
of the ultimate separation
terrific write
loved it
cheers
p
judyanne
Sat, 2012-04-21 00:07
hi P
lovely to see you
thank you very much for the awesome comment
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Nordic cloud
Tue, 2012-05-22 15:44
Just had a thought...
Just had a thought...
You don't know its whole
until it is gone.
annanya with love.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
judyanne
Mon, 2012-05-28 09:50
many a time annanya
we don't know it is there
until it is gone
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
judyanne
Mon, 2012-05-28 09:48
lol mark
then there's
fool is emotion
poured into a decision
to separate time
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
judyanne
Mon, 2012-08-20 01:13
thank so much mark
how strange - i'm sure that you already commented on this - see my reply above, and i can remember that you wrote a senryu to prompt the one i did in the reply... or was that another mark who has gone? - i could’ve sworn it was you
and your comment has gone
i wonder what happened there
anyway i really appreciate the supportive comment
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)