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Under The Cover Of Darkness
Under the cover of darkness
Secrets are made
hidden like treasures
in the heart of earth's core
Secrets are like diamonds
dirty, tainted with impurities of life
Secrets like ocean jewels
when purged of it's sins
makes the heart shines
like pearls on the necks of stars
Secrets made and shared
under the cover of darkness
when revealed at dawn
draws the light of truth
on mountaintops
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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I wrote this on my iPhone notepad then copied and paste so the format is a little off
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Billy Collins, Shakespeare, Emily Dickinson, Whitman, Jess Tapper
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loved
Wed, 2011-06-22 10:32
i once also wrote
under the cover of darkness
newly marrieds
did u or could u read it
please.
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Barbara Writes
Wed, 2011-06-22 11:26
Loved
I haven't read it but I will just
Send me a link to it in your comment
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author commentBarbara Writes
Wed, 2011-06-22 11:22
Loved
I haven't read it but I will
*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.
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author commentBarbara Writes
Wed, 2011-06-22 11:43
Ian
Thanks for the two suggestions I will make some edits
*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.
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author commentloved
Wed, 2011-06-22 11:45
i have justupdated it its called
under the dim lights
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Geezer
Mon, 2011-06-27 10:05
i agree...
with Ian, you should drop a few of the secrets, and I'm not sure about the line with diamonds. I thought diamonds were supposed to be a symbol of purity, and clear. ~ Gee
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