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Menace
My body is a menace.
Stands in the way of progress only to be hated by the runners of this here planet
My body ,only seeking refuge from the stares
Secretly they desire to squeeze and feel and discover it,
While all the while criticizing it's colour shape and essence
This body...a menace, only when I give you power over it
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Mon, 2024-10-21 20:00
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Menace" effectively conveys a sense of frustration and defiance towards societal expectations and judgments regarding one's body. The use of the word "menace" to describe the body adds a powerful and confrontational tone to the poem. The imagery of the body standing in the way of progress and seeking refuge from stares is evocative and relatable. The contrast between the desire to discover and criticize the body highlights the complexity of how bodies are perceived and treated by others. The final line about giving power over the body is thought-provoking and adds depth to the poem. Consider further exploring the emotions and experiences related to the body to enhance the impact of the poem.
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