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The Cruel Joke

Submitted by Asher on Tue, 2024-10-01 15:16

I don’t know how to face life and live, for I only had the chance to die
Losing myself led to my falling, why?
Sacrifices were all that you had known and I’m breaking
Always trying to be the one you loved
The one who’d dance in the rain when I was your beloved
You were a cruel joke and I’m falling into your lies
You comforted me with pain and I don’t hate you
The grand scheme of things, the words you said and I prayed.
I was a cruel joke to you and you never stumble left me and gone away.

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "The Cruel Joke" delves into themes of loss, sacrifice, love, and betrayal. The imagery of facing life with the feeling of only having the chance to die is powerful and evocative. The contrast between trying to be loved and feeling like a cruel joke adds depth to the emotional turmoil portrayed in the poem.

One suggestion for improvement would be to work on the flow and structure of the poem. Consider refining the transitions between different emotions and ideas to create a more cohesive narrative. Additionally, paying attention to the rhythm and meter of the poem could enhance its impact on the reader.

Overall, the poem effectively conveys a sense of vulnerability and inner conflict. With some adjustments to structure and flow, it has the potential to resonate even more with the reader.

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